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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people think that their
food
 should not contain meat and fish, as
such
food
 is bad for their health and detrimental to the universe. While I accept that saying no to meat is beneficial to some extent, in my opinion, it is not a suitable idea because few nutrients, which are essential for humans, are only obtainable from
such
 sources. On the individual level, they claim that meat is
poor
Suggestion
poorly
 for their health because it contains hazardous chemicals. Since the digestive system of animals is not efficient enough to eradicate
such
 toxic chemicals from their
body
 properly, its consumption by humans will eventually lead to severe diseases,
such
 as cancer of the digestive system or colon. They
also
 think that constantly using animals, as a source of
food
, means that those particular species will eventually diminish from the face of the globe. As each animal plays an important role in the stabilization of the whole ecosystem, its disturbance will have severe consequences on the lives of humans too. In spite of the arguments above, my point of view is that fauna and water bodies are useful for Homo sapiens because they are
the rich
Suggestion
the richest
 source of beneficial proteins and vitamins which are required for the human
body
 to function properly.
For example
, research conducted in Oxford university shows that beef and tuna fish are essential for the human
body
 as they contain high value of Vitamin B and C. If these nutrients do not obtain from these sources, functioning of the human
body
 will be affected, particularly of liver and kidney. In conclusion, while some individuals believe that using animals for one’s
food
 is not beneficial for their health and world
also
, I disagree with
this
 idea because of the above-mentioned reason.

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