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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people think that their
food
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 should not contain meat and fish, as
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food
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 is bad for their health and detrimental to the universe. While I accept that saying no to meat is beneficial to some extent, in my opinion, it is not a suitable idea because few nutrients, which are essential for humans, are only obtainable from
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 sources. On the individual level, they claim that meat is
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poorly
 for their health because it contains hazardous chemicals. Since the digestive system of animals is not efficient enough to eradicate
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 toxic chemicals from their
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 properly, its consumption by humans will eventually lead to severe diseases,
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 as cancer of the digestive system or colon. They
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 think that constantly using animals, as a source of
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, means that those particular species will eventually diminish from the face of the globe. As each animal plays an important role in the stabilization of the whole ecosystem, its disturbance will have severe consequences on the lives of humans too. In spite of the arguments above, my point of view is that fauna and water bodies are useful for Homo sapiens because they are
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the richest
 source of beneficial proteins and vitamins which are required for the human
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 to function properly.
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, research conducted in Oxford university shows that beef and tuna fish are essential for the human
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 as they contain high value of Vitamin B and C. If these nutrients do not obtain from these sources, functioning of the human
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 will be affected, particularly of liver and kidney. In conclusion, while some individuals believe that using animals for one’s
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 is not beneficial for their health and world
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, I disagree with
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 idea because of the above-mentioned reason.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Plant-based diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Deforestation
  • Water consumption
  • Mitigate climate change
  • Natural resources
  • Animal welfare
  • Humane and ethical choice
  • Healthcare costs
  • Sustainable farming
  • Legumes
  • Fruits and vegetables
  • Vegetarian
  • Vegan
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