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Nowadays artificial intelligence is being used to drive cars. Why is this happening? Is it positive or negative development?

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Artificial
intelligence
 has shown enormous advance with the
development
 of technology and now we see the applications of it in driving of automobiles as well.
This
 is probably due to the demand for minimising
traffic
 accidents and
this
 should be seen as a positive
development
 since it might save many lives by preventing road
traffic
 accidents that are linked to human errors. Many peoples` lives are being lost on the roads because of
traffic
 accidents every day and over than 95% of them are caused by human errors so there is a necessity to overcome
this
 problem. Tackling
this
 problem may not be so easy,
however
, with the advancement of artificial
intelligence
, controlling vehicles safely might reduce the number of accidents significantly.
For example
, Google has introduced a new car
uses
Suggestion
use
 artificial
intelligence
 which can identify dangerous situations by monitoring sensors and can alert the driver or take emergency control of the car in order to avoid an accident. Emergency braking, cross
traffic
 detectors, blind spot monitoring, and driver-assist steering can help avoid accidents and save lives in the process. I believe that using artificial
intelligence
 in driving cars should be welcome as a revolutionary
development
 and should be supported by all of us. All the injuries and fatalities that are caused by
traffic
 accidents linked to human errors, can be prevented with a help of
this
 new technology. The unpredictability of human behaviour and human conditions,
for example
, driving after alcohol intake or having a heart attack while operating a vehicle that most probably leads to a catastrophic accident can all be avoided by AI operated cars. In conclusion, using AI in driving cars is an incredible
development
 and should be encouraged to be used in future cars in order to eradicate human errors on the roads. By doing so, I believe we can save many lives.
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