Some people believe that entertainers are more importance then scientist. Do you agree or disagree?

Many folk argued that those who entertains are far more paramount
then
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than
experimentalist
in an experimental fashion
experimentally
as they always live in the limelight and enjoy luxury lifestyle
whereas
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Whereas
scientist
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scientific
works in the shadow and only gain public recognition after a successful project. I completely agree with the statement
,
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,
in
this
essay I
will
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Will
provide example to support my view.
To begin
with, people believe that fame and wages in entertainment profession,
such
as fashions, cinemas or sports increase rapidly as they gain an ability
to
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To
influence young generation lifestyle. To illustrate
,
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,
corporate companies hire a movie star to advertise their product since youngster, who follow them will
definitely
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Definitely
buy it. So, more the fan following an celebrity have, he or she
receive
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receives
more attraction.
Also
, being a scientist is a privilege and only
few
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a few
can achieve
this but
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this, but
they always work behind the scene and
its
it is
it's
a
rare
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rarity
that their project
receive
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receives
countrywise
occurring or extending throughout a country or nation
countrywide
recognition
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Recognition
and they become eye of the public.
For example
, Mr. K Sivan the director of ISRO recently
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