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housing is essential for people. some argue that government should offer free housing for people who cannot afford it. do you agree r disagree with this statement?

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No doubt, housing is of utmost importance to people. The fees for the house is on the increase and not affordable to many. So, according to some, the government should provide accommodation
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 free for individuals who are not able to pay for it. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 idea.
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, the income tax deducted by the government from the upper class members of the society is high and should be used for people who are paid below the minimum wage.
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, in the United States of America, between 20 and 40% is removed from an individual or a company whose income over $30,000. In order words, these resources should be used to cater for the less privileged in terms of housing.
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, housing statistics show that about 4% of the European Union population suffer from severe home deprivation which is a major driver of health status and affects both physical and mental health.
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 has an impact on the affected person's productivity at the workplace which will ultimately impact their interactions with their coworkers and organizational performance.
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, when accommodation fees are eliminated from people who are not able to afford it, it helps them to redirect the resources for housing on other things
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 has a feeding. As the saying goes: "a hungry man is an angry man";
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 means that
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 persons will have a positive attitude to life and will be able to give his or her best to other tasks which will result in increased output. To conclude, I agree that it is expedient that the government alleviate the challenges faced by lower social class members of the society by proving free housing units.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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