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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are becoming more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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It is thought by some that the internet has reduced the gap between people, others say that people and their community are in isolation because of the web. In my opinion,
although
 I agree that the internet has bridged the gap between individuals across the world, it has not done so to the communities. On the one hand, some believe that since its invention, the internet has brought individuals closer because it made communication a lot easier and faster. Before now, communication was by either post office mail or telegram which takes a lot of time. Currently, through various online social media,
such
 as Facebook and WhatsApp, you can reach out to family and friends without any delay via text messages or video calls.
Additionally
, you can meet and make new friends via these media.
On the other hand
, others argue that the web has driven not only humans but
also
 the society
further
 apart due to its constant use.
In other words
, many become addicted to their gadgets,
such
 as phones and laptops, where they either engage in a chat or online games,
thus
, ignoring their immediate environment and those around them. As a consequence, there is a reduced social interaction and activity, which in turn, leads to lack of understanding, segregation and loneliness.
Finally
, in my opinion, while the net has brought individuals close, it is yet to do so with the communities.
For example
, you can search for your childhood friend on Facebook and be able to reconnect, which would have been impossible without the web.
Conversely
, the society is driven far apart when we are busy online spending time with people unknown to us, without considering those within our reach.
Hence
, our society is becoming more isolated because of the net. In conclusion, though people may vary in their views, I consider that the net has bridged the gap between individuals, but has put the community in isolation due to less face-to-face communication.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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