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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times, and they think it is a waste of time to read any entertainments books. What is your opinion about this?

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As the competition increases with each day so the parents do want their children to read only serious educational books at all the times because they do not want them to get diverted from studies by reading
entertainment
 books. As per the parents reading only serious educational books will keep their young ones sincere towards studies and which in result will help them to score better and to get better future opportunities in terms of jobs.
On the contrary
, if they will read
entertainment
 books their
mind
 will get diverted and
this
 might hamper their upcoming life because they will not be able to focus on their studies completely. In my opinion, both studies and good
time
 are equally important. Education is really important for an individual to reach prestigious heights in their life by getting a better job or by getting better future prospects, but no one can keep themselves involved in education all the times and to study well a break is required. The break can be taken in several forms from watching television to following your hobbies or passion or by spending some
time
 in reading any
entertainment
 books to refresh their
mind
 and to follow a bright to be
time
 again. I believe that education and
entertainment
 can be taken side by side to maintain a balance in life and to not get stressed or depressed by studying the whole day and by keeping yourself busy in scoring higher than the
last
time
.
Entertainment
 books will
also
 help to increase your reading habits along with the fact to make your
mind
 feel fresh which will make it work better than before because the pressure from your brain gets released and your
mind
 get relief from all the thoughts that were going on in your head during studies. In conclusion, I would like to say that I support free
time
 or
entertainment
 based books.

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