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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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In certain areas of the US, teenagers are not allowed to walk in the streets after a particular
time
 unless they travel with their parents or adults. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay will discuss why I agree that teenagers are not allowed after a specific
time
 without adults. The main reason is the security of teenagers in the country. Most of the child trafficking
happen
Suggestion
happens
 in the
night
, especially when they are in the streets late
night
. Reason statistics from the New York police department shows that 75% of the teenagers trafficking happened in the
night
. They
also
 said that it would be easier to abduct a child in the
night
 as there will be less disturbances. One of the children of New York Resident were kidnapped in the
night
 during
last
 winter by a homeless person.
However
,
police
Suggestion
the police
 managed to
brought
Suggestion
bring
 him back from Mexico where the child had been sold to a smuggler. The
second
 main reason is teenagers have good and bad influences from the community or the society they live in
.
Accept space
.
 Drugs and other illegal items
are sold
Suggestion
sell
 to teenagers who walk around during the
night
, because most of the gangsters and drug dealers can easily reach teenagers in the
night
.
Accept space
.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
 drug dealers use teenagers to sell drugs in the city as people/police will not suspect them. In the UK, some children have been addicted to drugs and they are selling drugs to other people in
order earn money
Suggestion
order to earn money
 and consume drugs. Due to the security and bad influences
by
Suggestion
of
 the society, teenagers should not be allowed to walk in the streets. To conclude, teenagers should be not allowed to walk in the streets after a specific
time
 unless they travel with parents or adults. It’s the responsibility of parents and adults to stop teenagers being affected by bad influences from the society.
This
 essay has discussed the importance of
curfew
Suggestion
the curfew
a curfew
 imposed on teenagers after a particular
time
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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