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Today people are traveling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of traveling to the traveler?

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Most individuals frequently make trips to different cities and countries today than in the past.
This
 write-up acknowledges that due to cheaper airfares these days, one can travel to any destination of their choice and
also
 enjoy the luxury of creating lifetime memories.
This
 essay will
first
 discuss why
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 has now become an everyday lifestyle because of low-priced air tickets and have a
second
 look at the wonderful impressions
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 has on
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
travelling
travels
. In the past,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to a foreign nation was a stuff of pipe dreams which only the rich and famous could afford because, most salaried employees could not cover the cost of a flight to a different country.
Thus
,
majority
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the majority
 of individuals simply took their holidays domestically or just stayed at home.
However
, with
recent revolutionalized rise
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a recent revolutionalized rise
the recent revolutionalized rise
 in budget airlines, all
this
 has changed. Low-cost carriers
such
 as Flair Airline in Canada or Tiger Air in Asia, have meant that anyone can save up and travel to a new city with prices starting as low as 5 dollars. One advantage of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 is that, it creates long lasting lifetime memories. No matter how insignificant it may seem, the fact that you have had an experience abroad, something and hat was out of the ordinary; establishes a memory that you will remember for a long time. My grandfather
for instance
, was an amazing storyteller who used to tell me stories of the trips he made when he was younger. One of my
favorite
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favourites
favourite
 is how he tried eating with chopsticks in China for the
first
 time. He regretted not
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 more as a young man. Years later, he still remembered everything in details because
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 left a real imprint on him. In conclusion, the creation of budget airlines had made it possible for countless carriers to tout the cheapest fares from the runways of airports in the United Kingdom, Canada, Asia and the United States of America, to mention just a few, opening up a whole host of opportunities that were once a fantasy; low-cost skiing joints to the French Alps; spontaneous city breaks to Baku or Bratislava, a family holiday or even the luxury of eating with chopsticks in China - who would have thought it!

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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