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Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. What problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?

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In recent years, due to increasing urbanization, many youngsters are migrating to cities for better opportunities, while leaving the older population in the
countryside
. There are few challenges because of
this
 trend,
such
 as no growth and development of the rural areas and no support for the older population.
This
 essay will discuss both the problems in detail and suggest a few solutions to tackle these issues.
Firstly
, the essential factor for a developing country to prosper is to have agriculture as the backbone for growth. Agriculture is the primary occupation that adds employment and consumption to the economy. Farming is mainly a
countryside
 activity which requires the participation of the young population. If the young generations move out of their hometown to work in cities, the agriculture would be slowed down or stopped in that region, which will, in turn, reduce the economy of the rural areas.
Secondly
, if there are no adults in the
countryside
, it will be challenging for older people to do things independently.
For instance
, the
countryside
 does not have easy access to medical facilities. In case of any emergency, they wouldn’t have support for commute or assistance. To manage the above issues, the government should provide more lucrative employment opportunities in the
country side
rural regions
countryside
, so that the youngsters can work in the field of their interest, as wells as they can take care of their parents. Another solution could be increasing the government investment that would help in establishing good schools and hospitals so that the young generation can have a better quality of life even in the
countryside
. To conclude, while it is difficult to stop
the young
Suggestion
the younger
 generation from migrating towards the city, it is crucial to protect the economic growth and support the ageing people by offering more advanced facilities and opportunities that would force them to reconsider their decision to leave their hometown.
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