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There are people who suffer from poverty in every country. What do you think the reasons for poverty are in your country and what do you think can be done to help these impoverished people?

#people #poverty #country
There is no clear definition of what a “poor
country
” is. The common understanding is that a
country
 is poor if the majority of its people do not have a certain minimum living standard. Wikipedia lists a number of more quantitative criteria, ranging from low average income, or a low Gross National Income per capita, to a low Human-Development-Index [44].
This
 is not to say that material wealth would be the most important or the only factor to optimize. Yet, it constitutes a rough approximation for the well-being of the people. Poverty is usually
also
 not distributed equally in the
country
: Certain ethnic, religious, or social groups might be particularly advantaged or disadvantaged. As Hans Rosling points out in an informative and entertaining talk about
country
 statistics [130], the population in poor countries is usually affected very unequally by poverty. The common assumption under any definition of “poor
country
” is that Japan, North America, Australia, New Zealand, Western Europe, and Israel are considered “not poor”.
This
 essay will refer to these countries as “rich”. It will refer to Western Europe, North America, Australia and New Zealand as “the West”. African countries and South-Asian countries are usually considered “poor”.
This
 text,
in particular
, is inspired by my trips to Senegal, Morocco, South America, and India.
Therefore
, it mainly focuses on these regions as “poor”. I do not know in how far my thoughts transfer to other countries.
Also
, not all countries are equally poor. Some developing countries have a higher GDP than developed countries.
Furthermore
, some countries are behind on some accounts, but way ahead
on
Suggestion
of
 others. Cuba, e.g., has a lower child mortality rate than the US [130].
Therefore
,
this
 text will discuss potential reasons for poverty without claiming that they would apply equally to all poor countries. There is considerable dispute about the right term for “poor countries”. The word “poor” has a very negative connotation.
Furthermore
, “poor countries” are not necessarily poor: They often have vast natural resources.
On the other hand
, terms
such
 as “developing” or “industrializing” are very positive. They imply that the
country
 would actually be moving out of poverty. Unfortunately,
this
 is not always the case. I have
therefore
 opted for the term “less economically developed
country
”, or “LED

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic Disparities
  • Unemployment
  • Underemployment
  • Education Inequality
  • Healthcare Inequality
  • Financial Instability
  • Cost of Living
  • Social Welfare Programs
  • Government Policy
  • Geographic Disparities
  • Development
  • Infrastructure
  • Steady Income
  • Basic Needs
  • Cycle of Poverty
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