More and more people in the city live in homes with small spaces or no outdoor areas. Do you think it is a negative or positive development?
A large number of
people
are considering flats and apartments as their accommodations in urban areas
without any open space
and gardens. As it has both kinds of impacts on human nature. Because the one
basic factor is that family bonds become strong and it is easy to clean. Whereas
, the drawbacks are that as it does not contain any garden one
can feel stressed and due to
the small area unable to do physical activities like outdoor games. I believe that the advantages are greater than the disadvantages hence
it is a positive development.
On the one
hand, a growing population is moving toward the city and starting to live there in compact spaces where the rooms and other necessities are not so big like big houses in the village. I think it has a huge impact on families as they stay closer they don't have their separate rooms hence
they can spend more quality time
together. The family bond becomes stronger and parents
can keep an eye on their children. For instance
, most of the individuals who live in big houses do not spend time
with their parents
they remain stuck in their rooms and live a sedentary life, playing online games creates a huge distance between parents
and offspring. However
, those who live in a close environment have a small space
and play in front of their parents
and also
share their happiness with them easily. Secondly
, it is easily maintainable to keep it neat and tidy and less time
is needed to clean it hence
it is also
time
-saving so we can spend our time
in other activities as well smoothly.
On the flip side, there are some downsides as well people
who are living in confined areas
where there is no such
space
where a person can feel fresh and keep their pets along with
that they do not have any space
to place plants and water them. This
whole situation sometimes leads a person to severe depression as living creatures need sunlight, fresh air, and open areas
to breathe well and feel relaxed. Therefore
, it becomes suffocating, and most of the time
people
feel gloomy as they are unable to do physical exercise like walking, or watering the plant. In addition
, they do not have any privacy due to
congested space
no one
has a proper room.
In conclusion, people
prefer to live in cities in small areas
because it is easily manageable for them and they can share their feelings and thoughts clearly with their family members. Consequently
, one
can get family support, and it also
enhances love and care for other members. So, the merits have higher weight as compared to demerits therefore
it is a positive development.Submitted by aimenmalik2021 on
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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear position throughout the response, but the development of ideas could be more comprehensive in terms of the negative aspects. Consider expanding on your examples to fully address the prompt.
coherence cohesion
The logical progression of ideas is evident, and you have made an effort to use cohesive devices. However, there's room for improvement in the logical structure and linking of ideas. Consider varying your sentence structures and using a wider range of cohesive devices for improved flow.
coherence cohesion
You included an introduction and conclusion, which is good, but they could be more impactful. Make sure your introductory paragraph clearly states the topic and your stance, while your conclusion should effectively summarize the main points without introducing new information.
coherence cohesion
You have supported your main points, but the support could be more detailed and relevant. Include more specific examples or evidence that directly relate to the positive and negative impacts of living in small spaces with no outdoor areas.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.