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Nowadays, International Tourism is one of the biggest industries in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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It seems that the international tourism business is at its peak in today life as more and more people travel overseas each year.
This
 phenomenon leads to an argument that
such
 improvement has created tautness between local inhabitants and foreigners
instead
 of understanding, while others argue in reverse. In my opinion, I firmly agree with the former notion due to different living habit, language barrier, and rejection by some indigenous dwellers. Needless to say, the development of today lives has caused the ease of travelling abroad.
This
 causes global tourism becoming the largest industry all around the globe. Inevitably,
this
 alteration leads to inadequate term among people from different cultures. The distinction of lifestyle sometimes causes tension among these individuals since they will judge at each other
as a result
 of a misunderstanding.
For example
, the way of western people dressing –revealed clothes- is totally unacceptable in some countries like the middle-east. For so some,
such
 action represents disrespectful behaviour for local culture. In the end, tension or misunderstanding is a matter that can be avoided. Apart from the previous discussion, one of the obstacles that are often faced by native and foreigners are in terms of communication due to different languages. Language barrier leads to mis-communication that often ends up as a clash between two sides.
Moreover
, in some areas, there are local people who look at comers negatively because of their past history.
This
 creates tension since natives show unpleasant feeling to visitors.
For instance
, in Bangladesh, some elderlies attitude toward Pakistani tourists. They often show rejection to
such
 people since Pakistan colonized Bangladesh in the bygone era. Seeing Pakistan probably brings past trauma to elders. In conclusion, it is clear that global tourism produces misunderstanding
instead
 of friendship between visitors and local occupants due to the differences in living habits, language, and unwilling by some groups.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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