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Many people believe that social networking sites (Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree.

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It is known that social networks have increasingly gained popularity among users specially for the rise of fake news and influence.
Hence
, governments are spot-lightning
such
 companies in order to set up regulations that create a digital-protective shield for society and individuals.
This
 essay will discuss why
Facebook
, among others, are struggling to evidence their positive impact worldwide.
Firstly
, the provided freedom that digital users have in a fully-connected world must be restricted.
For instance
, posting untrue information, harm other users' ideas or create lies through viral chains could be considered dangerous even for any country's national security.
Moreover
, when
this
 type of behaviour is found deep in politicians, the effect would even greater.
Secondly
, in 2018, while Marck Zuckemberg,
Facebook
 CEO, was stating that they do not have any guilt on privacy matters, millions and millions of data were leaking to Cambridge Analytica, a company that used
this
 information against the UK government to win Brexit referendum. It is clear that platforms as
Facebook
 could do more damage than good to people. Overall, taking control somehow of social networks might be considered as a way of censorship and against free speech.
However
, actions must be taken in order to reduce aggressive users' performance while companies like
Facebook
 must exceed efforts to cooperate with leaders around the globe and guarantee a more secure and safe social network.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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