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The best way to solve the traffic congestion in city is to provide free public transport for 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that providing the citizens with free 24/7
transportation
 services is the most effective solution
for
Suggestion
to
 traffic problems in many regions of the world. While I acknowledge many benefits from the provision of free
transportation
, the country implementing
such
 change will only be successful under certain circumstances and there are a wide variety of other suitable methods that should be considered by the governments. On the one hand, if the city inhabitants can command the preference for public
transport
 over personal vehicles,
this
 can bring many positives for the community on dealing with the traffic issues.
First
, the
road
infrastructure
 would not be overfilled with cars and motorbikes if less of these vehicles are being active in the street. Singapore is almost never faced with
road
 gridlock as people can see very few personal vehicles operating on
road
Suggestion
the road
 and most of its residents would rather use the mass underground for travelling.
Secondly
, personal vehicles would surely no longer be usable if the government could be able to carry out
national
Suggestion
a national transportation scheme
national transportation schemes
the national transportation scheme
transportation
 scheme that could offer access to any available area in the country.
On the other hand
, the argument that the installation of public
transport
 with no fees required is
second
 to no other in removing
road
 congestion seems to be a stretch since
such
 proposal would be accomplished only in countries with robust economic strength and developed
infrastructure
.
In particular
, free buses in Vietnam are at shabby conditions due to insufficient resources for regular maintenance and bus drivers are usually behind schedule that result from their questioning work ethics and underdeveloped
road
infrastructure
 in Vietnam.
Therefore
, customers are in no hesitance to switch back to their personal vehicles for travelling. Above all, if the national
transportation
 system were thoroughly designed that offer high-quality seating and punctual travelling services, customers would be even more willing to use public
transport
 and
thus
 attenuate the impact of traffic congestion. What the government ought to do
instead
 is to change the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 to use public
transport
 of the inhabitants and to improve the
infrastructure
 built for public vehicles. In conclusion, the answer to the success of free
transportation
 hinges on many factors and there are a wide variety of other effective solutions to
this
 problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transport
  • personal vehicles
  • infrastructure
  • service frequency
  • sustainable city planning
  • financial implications
  • congestion charges
  • promoting cycling or walking
  • ride-sharing apps
  • smart traffic management systems
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