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Some people believe that in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Different people have various hobbies that they take up in order to spend their leisure
time
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. Some individuals are of the opinion that hobbies should be
challenging
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challenged
 in order for them to be enjoyable.
However
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, I completely disagree with
this
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 notion for reasons that I will discuss below.
First
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 of all, what hobby a person prefers depends on their personal interest regardless of whether they are difficult or not. Some prefer to spend their
lesiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time
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 going to the gym or playing sports whereas others prefer doing things that are physically less taxing like knitting or gardening.
Secondly
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, the nature of a
persons
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person's
 occupation
also
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 determines what they would want to do in their free
time
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.
For instance
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, a farmer who spends a long
dat
time for Earth to make a complete rotation on its axis
day
 at the field would probably prefer to spend their
time
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 indoors either having a dinner with their friends or catching up on some television.
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, someone who spends most of his
time
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 on a table behind his
coumputer
a machine for performing calculations automatically
computer
 would prefer something that involves physical activity or the outdoors.
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, most people are looking to relax and rejuvenate themselves during their free
time
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, and opt for
activites
any specific behavior
activities
 that do not require much mental stimulation. If they spend their
lesiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time
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in
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on
 things that challenge them, they may not be able to fully recharge and energize themselves for their stressful routine. In conclusion, I believe that how a person spends their free
time
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 is really a matter of personal choice and while some enjoy
thier
of them or themselves
their
 hobbies to be challenging
,
Accept space
,
 others prefer to do things that
complelety
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 rest their minds and bodies.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of accomplishment
  • overcoming obstacles
  • gratifying
  • continuous source of enjoyment
  • relaxing activities
  • unwind and de-stress
  • counterproductive
  • mental break
  • subjective
  • personal preference
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