Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both school and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is sometimes argued that a large number of children nowadays have a poor way of living. Both schools and parents need to have a sense of responsibility for solving

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problem. In my opinion, I totally agree with

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statement and I will explain why in

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essay. It is true that there are many things that schools can do a variety of things to educate children to have a better lifestyle.

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of all, they should prohibit harmful foods like snack or soft drink because of the damaging effects to the students' health and they may cause insulin resistance. Another thing that schools may need to do are teaching their students about the risk of a sedentary lifestyle. Because when the students know how good can the healthy life bring to them, they would change their daily routines in positive ways

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

143 words

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Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both school and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In spite of the advances made in argiculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree

Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today, to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?