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Nowadays, people are spending increasingly large amounts of money on their marriage parties. Many people feel large and expensive weddings cause problems for the bride and groom. Do you agree? Use personal examples in your response.

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Weddings, undoubtedly, are becoming more lavish day by day. Some believe
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 marriage extravaganza causes financial burden and unnecessary stress on the
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 couples and I completely agree with
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, in order to afford grand weddings, new couples and their families normally undertake big loans or use their long-term savings.
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 is because by doing so, they feel integrated in their society and
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, they will not carry the stigma of being poor or stingy.
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, when my cousin got married, her parents used all the money that they have been saving for years into her big day. Had they done a small marriage, depending on their affordability, that money could have been used in a more useful and productive way.
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, large parties come with plenty of stressful moments. In an aim to have everything perfectly set up in a short span of
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 brides and grooms do not enjoy these days as much as they should have been. To exemplify, my best friend who is
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 a big fan of an Indian actress, tried to imitate her big fat wedding, and end up spending much of her
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 looking for perfect caterers along with event planners so that nothing goes amiss. Had she spent that
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 with her would-be-husband, they would have had the chance to know one another which could have helped them in the
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 life. In conclusion, despite big weddings make people feel socially prestigious, it does not outweigh the negative impacts that it causes on
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 husbands and wives.
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 money and
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 could have been spent into more fruitful and rewarding way specially
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