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Research indicates that the charateristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. which do you consider to be major influence.

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Studies clearly state that a
person
's
personality
 and development are judged with their inborn qualities than any other references that he/she had come across in their live's. According to me only the inborn qualities that we possess would exhibit our
character
 and our
personality
 to the outsiders. Some peoples
personality
 and their development are purely relevant
on
Suggestion
to
 their
character
. These characters are not built all of a sudden these are qualities that should come from our birth. Each and every
person
 in
this
 world will have different or similar
character but
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character, but
 these qualities cannot be learnt or get
reffered
make reference to
referred
 from others these has to come by birth. Learning and implying others quality
to
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of
 our routine will never ever give good impression to others. People will see us as a xerox of another
person
.
Possesing
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Possessing
other
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an other character
character
 will never define who the
person
 we are, only the inborn qualities will give us the thrust for our
personality
 and
developoment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
.
Eventhough
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Even though
, we learn some qualities from our fellow beings and applying it in our
routine it
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routine, it
 will not be nice, because it would replicate only others not us.
Although
 seeking good qualities from others would even enhance our true
character
, if we start to possess other bad qualities with us
then
 it would kill our
orginality
the ability to think and act independently
originality
 and sometimes there are even chances of people hating us and even sometime we may forget our own
character
 when we start to admire other inborn qualities. To conclude, exhibiting one's inborn
qulities
an essential and distinguishing attribute of something or someone
qualities
 to the world, he would be
recogonised
generally approved or compelling recognition
recognized
recognised
 as true human. Acquiring and adapting other qualities would kill our
orginality
the ability to think and act independently
originality
. I support only the inborn qualities will have strong influence on our
personality
 and development.

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