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Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #access #information #libraries
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Students are currently able to acquire
information
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 on the
internet
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 in a much faster way than in the past. While I accept that online resources of
information
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 have advantages over traditional libraries, I would argue that there is still a great need for libraries in today’s world. It is true that accessing
information
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 online has several clear benefits. The
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 one is that online sources can store a lot more
information
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 than any physical library.
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 allows researchers to easily get
information
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 without travelling to a local library.
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, students can look for
information
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 on the
internet
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 whenever they want, while most libraries can only be visited during certain hours of the day.
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, finding
information
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 online is easier for people who are busy with their work during daytime.
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, I believe that physical libraries still have special features that online sources can never have. The
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 one, of course, is the ambience. Libraries usually provide a quiet space for reading or learning.
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 will greatly benefit students who are learning or researching since they are less likely to be distracted by people or things around them.
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, many university students claim that they can only concentrate when they are in a quiet study area in their university library.
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, since everyone can easily write and post
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internet
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, these online sources are not always reliable for research.
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, we need libraries whose staff members have the responsibility to select and provide readers with the most credible materials. In conclusion, while I agree that there are several benefits to getting
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internet
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, I disagree with the idea that traditional libraries are no longer important.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible information
  • online databases
  • e-books
  • educational websites
  • community centers
  • physical books
  • literacy programs
  • peer-reviewed resources
  • misleading information
  • digital divide
  • high-speed internet
  • underprivileged communities
  • custodians of culture
  • archival material
  • conducive environment
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