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Space travel has been made sometime and people think that space tourism will be probably developed in the future. Do you think space travel would be a positive or negative development.

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People think that
space
 tourism will be probably developed in the future as
space
 travel currently started its journey. In
this
 essay will discuss the new technology which will be helpful for people to appreciate science more and benefits it has to offer.
In contrast
 to
this
, the impact which can lead to
destruction
Suggestion
the destruction
 of Earth and its people shall be taken consideration as well. When
space
 exploration has been made,
people
Suggestion
person's
peoples'
peoples
 curiosity rise. Scientists, astronauts, engineers believe that if
space
 tourism happens, a lot of employment will be in demand. Recent news that Virgin Galactic will start its
first
 flight in the atmosphere in 2020.
(
Accept space
(
NDTV Science News Online). It will be a great experience seeing what lies ahead of earth sitting in a state-of-the-art
space
 shuttle for the
first
 time.
In contrast
, there are
also
 cons to
space
 tourism. The employment of these scientists, astronauts, experiments and trials cost
huge amount
Suggestion
a huge amount
huge amounts
 of money. If the government will spend
this
 money on
this
 new technology, the help to the other fields which requires more funding and assistance including education, health, services will be set aside.
Moreover
, these
space
 aircrafts are
danger
Suggestion
dangerous
 to the environment due to the gas being used out of it. It can increase global
warming which
Accept comma addition
warming, which
 can lead hazards to Earth. Due to the popularity of
space
 exploration which gains public attention, people feel more the
intense
Suggestion
intensity
 of
space
 travel. In my opinion,
space
 travel will be a
success
Suggestion
successful
 development of mankind due to the perseverance of those in-change in
this
 venture to conduct more studies discoveries from time to time.

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