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show the changes of the number of visitors in three main major airports in New York city from 1995 to 2000

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The bar chart illustrates the figure for tourists who used three main airports in N
re
not far distant in time or space or degree or circumstances
Near
York city from 1995 to 2000. Overall
,
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,
it is evident that people prefer using L
aGuardia
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the LaGuardia airport
airport
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 to the others I
n
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During
the
first
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 3 years
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,
from 1995 to 1997
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,
John F.Kennedy
airport
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 is the most popular as we can see the upward t
ren
a general direction in which something tends to move
trend
from 26
million
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 to 47
million
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 passengers
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,
which nearly doubled
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.
There was
also
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 a rise in the number of travellers u
sign
an act that exploits or victimizes someone (treats them unfairly)
using
LaGuardia
airport
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,
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,
but in 1997 it w
asn;t
was not
wasn't
as high as the number of travellers using John F.Kennedy
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,
which stood at 44 m
ilion
(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units
million
in 1997. Newark a
iport
an airfield equipped with control tower and hangars as well as accommodations for passengers and cargo
airport
had the least tourist in 3 years
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;
however
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.
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.
i
t
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It
was following the same trend as the other airports
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,
increased from 16
million
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 to approximately 4
million
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 passengers in 1997 Between 1998 and 2000, the number travellers in LaGuardia
airport
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 kept going up and reached a peak at closely 70 m
illin
(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units
million
millions
people
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,
while John F.Kennedy a
iport
an airfield equipped with control tower and hangars as well as accommodations for passengers and cargo
airport
witnessed a f
reamatic
excessively agitated; distraught with fear or other violent emotion
frantic
fall to almost 30 m
ilion
(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units
million
people by 1999
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,
but it soon returned to 45
million
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 people. Whereas the figure for passengers using Newark
airport
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 were unchanged in the perid od 3 years
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