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Write the advantages and disadvantages of CCTV cameras.

#cctv #cameras
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Technology is a double edged sword. While innovation and upgrades can make our lives easier, they can be even used to cause trouble.
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 most of us reap the benefits of technology, some with the vested interest are able to cause trouble
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 the rest of us. Security
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 is one
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 modern technology which has proved to be a boon for 90% of the population
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of
 combating crimes.
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, just like every other technology, it comes with its own disadvantages. The biggest advantage with
CCTV
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 cameras is that they provide a sense of security to people. Even more the mischief makers try to be their best, because they can see an eye watching them and they are aware that they might be caught red-handed.
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,
CCTV
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 cameras enable us to tab any suspicious activity that helps in stopping the crime before happening. The other great benefit of using
CCTV
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 cameras is that they create a room for gathering evidences.
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-: You have a witness
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to
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 a particular crime, but it so happens that they
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themselves
 self missed out on some details. A
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camera
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ensures
 you don’t miss on anything. On the negative side of the coin,
CCTV
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 cameras pose a great threat to the privacy of an individual. Even
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more, it
 creates a sense of
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a suspect
 in the minds of people.
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-: an employee may feel as if his/her employer does not trust him/her enough to let him/her work independently off the
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.
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, a
camera
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 is a costly thing to install. Apart from installing, they require proper time to time maintenance. Another issue with
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 cameras is that they are quite vulnerable.
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-: a tech savvy thief with knowledge about the
camera
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 might close it when required or in
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worst
 cases the
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 may be hacked. To sum up, just like a knife can be used to cut a vegetable or do a murder,
CCTV
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 cameras have both advantages and disadvantages. It is upon us as to how we use it.

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