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Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Education
 is an important part of everyone’s life and it plays a very important role in the growth of an individual. Making
education
 free for everyone and managing all by the government will be a very big step towards the rapid growth of a
society
. All parents want to make their children educated by sending them to school,
colleges but
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colleges, but
 sometimes due to the lack of resources, they have to deprive their children even from the basic
education
. By making
education
 free of all will ensure that nobody will miss
education
 just because they can’t afford to pay. A government’s step of making the
education
 free will set an example in our
society
. It will show that if you have a strong will and determination to study and prosper, not having any money or resource will not stop you from making a paradigm shift.
Education
 with no fees will identify all those talents which can be at top given
education
 and
guidance but
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guidance, but
 get lost because their parents can’t afford to pay for schools. Everyone will stand
equal chance
Suggestion
an equal chance
 to succeed. It will increase the literacy rate of that country and will improve the growth of that country as well. It was seen in the past that countries having higher literacy rates have been more successful. By making
education
 free, a majority of people will be educated, making overall a positive environment in our
society
. There will be fewer crimes in
society
. Educating people will be making them more responsible. Governments should put more emphasis on
education
 by making it free. Just like
food and shelter
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food, shelter and education
food shelter and education
education
 should
also
 be a basic right and
free
Suggestion
freedom
 for everyone.
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