IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#abortion #increases #topic #people
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
During the past years, a disputable matter has risen by the increasing rate of
abortion
Use synonyms
 cases. Some believe that termination of pregnancy should be legalised to protect the mother's safety from risky procedures, while others disagree and compare
abortion
Use synonyms
 to a crime. On the one hand, having a law which legitimate
abortion
Use synonyms
 will decrease the unwanted circumstances of an illegal
abortion
Use synonyms
.
In other words
Linking Words
, women who have the right to access clinics legally to terminate an unwanted pregnancy, will have a safe an advanced procedure compared to the illegal process that uses painful and risky methods.
As a result
Linking Words
, Maternal injuries and death rates caused by the unsafe and illegal abortions will decrease.
This
Linking Words
 fact is evidenced by the rate of woman dying in the process of an
abortion
Use synonyms
 decreasing after legalizing
abortion
Use synonyms
 in the USA.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, there are people who are against
abortion
Use synonyms
 completely and consider it a crime. Some think that
abortion
Use synonyms
 is simply killing a human being, meaning that the parent is defying god wishes. Rather, they argue that
instead
Linking Words
 of aborting, they should put the baby for adoption to help the incapable parent to have children on their own. Various developing countries,
for example
Linking Words
, encourage the pregnant individuals and help them emotionally and medically during their pregnancies to avoid
abortion
Use synonyms
. In my opinion, I think that
abortion
Use synonyms
 should be authorised in
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 unwanted situation
such
Linking Words
 as rape.
However
Linking Words
, in other situations, facilities and doctors should aware the parent and introduce other options to prevent
abortion
Use synonyms
. In conclusion, terminating a pregnancy is nowadays a debatable matter, where some agree that authorising the process will decrease the rate of harm resulting from the illegal and brutal adoption while others describe it as a crime. For me, I am convinced that
abortion
Use synonyms
 should be legal in specific situations, but spreading
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
 is
also
Linking Words
 a necessity to provide other options.
Submitted by jys004ielts on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: