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Some people said that men and women have different qualities, that men are suitable for certain jobs, women more suitable for others. Do you agree/disagree?

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A debated topic in society is the equality between two genders. While some people think that male and female can choose the same jobs, I believe that the natural differences make male and female more suitable for particular occupations. On the one hand, there are many jobs in which the performances of both genders are the same. The performance in office jobs is based on qualifications and set of skills that an employee has but not on genders.
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, if a male and a female have the equally academic and practical background, he/she could do the office jobs as well as the other.
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, anybody who has the knowledge in accounting could be successful in
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 career path regardless of their gender.
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, I believe men are more suitable for some types of jobs other than women and vice versa. The reason is that male is naturally stronger than women. Normally, a man has larger and stronger muscles and the ability to react faster than a woman does.
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, men could do jobs,
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, driving, mining and
blacksmithing
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, which require physical strength better than women.
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, as women are usually more careful and more patient than men, some tasks
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 as cleaning or sewing could be done better by a female. In conclusion, I believe that while certain jobs could be done well by both genders, some jobs are more appropriate for one gender.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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