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Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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International sporting events are always a source of attraction for everyone and a large number of people used to attend these events to express their love and support for their
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. Many people argue that
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 occasions are mandatory for exhausting their hate and tension
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. Others state that these events could boost up tension between countries and deteriorate their relation. I agree to some extent that
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 opportunities could be a menace to the people of nations. It is often seen that people start fighting over supporting their
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. Sometimes the situation goes out of control and causes lots of casualties. Many unbiased people are
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 hurt in these riots.
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 will end by leaving bad impressions of their
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 to the world.
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, events like football or cricket world cup provide an opportunity for people to understand and explore the cultures and norms of their rival
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. They closely observed and spend time with each other.
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 will surely help in removing their conflicts and disputes to some extent. In some cases,
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 as in football world cup 2014, after elimination of North Korea, the supporters of both South and North Korea supported South Korea by sidelining their personal differences.
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 is the perfect example to demonstrate the worth of these events. In conclusion, I believe that international events are not proved to be fruitful in lessening high temperature between nations. They seem to be more destructive and violent while supporting their teams.
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, people could become normal by increasing the frequency of these events.
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