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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Even though, agriculture had experienced tremendous development so far, there are still individuals suffering from
hunger
 and famine. The main reasons causing
this
 phenomenon are that the advances did not happen all around the
world
 equally and
also
 the new methods and technologies implemented by farmers in these days and age are expensive to own and use. The development of agriculture around the
world
 does not follow a same pattern and in some regions
such
 as USA or Europe, there is exponential growth in the amount of goods produced by farm workers while in other parts
for instance
 Africa the increases in the amount of
food
 produced by farmers are not so great and did not meet the needs of a growing population. One the other hand nowadays production of
food
 on farms is a process in constant need of technology, which in many cases are not cheap and affordable for all the people around the
world
. To overcome the
hunger
 crisis forever new technologies and methods should be invented in a way that they could be affordable for farmers in poor areas of the
world
.
Furthermore
, International organization
such
 as the UN or FAO which are accountable for helping those whom suffering from
hunger
 should invest in bringing
this
 method and instruments to those who are in need of them. In conclusion, growing plants and extracting
food
 from them has a different story in every part of the
world
 in some parts of the
world
, it takes so much effort to grow
food
 and advance tools and methods are too expensive for some of these regions and unless developed countries and transnational organization help them
otherwise
 they can not fight
hunger
 and poverty.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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