The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people think that the best way to improve

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is by giving stricter

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to careless drivers. To a certain point, I would agree with the statement, but there are other methods that could

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be used to improve it as imposing a stricter penalty, in my opinion, is not the only way to ensure

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on roads. On the one hand, it is true that having a stricter

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and increasing the penalties for irresponsible drivers would reduce traffic accidents and improve

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, it is a fact that using a mobile phone while driving a car is a dangerous act.

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, due to the light

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, many people still use the phone while driving. Should the authority change the

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into a heavier one,

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people will consider twice before they use the phone while driving.

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, violation of any traffic rule can lead to a severe accident and if the

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is made a stern, people would likely obey them.

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, there is another method that the government could use in improving

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having a stricter

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. The government could make a campaign about

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driving through various

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media, which

would show the effect of careless driving.

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, the government could make a

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video about

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safety

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and upload it in social media since the message will be effectively spread in

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kind of media. As more people are watching these videos, it is hoped that drivers will have a clearer view of

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driving. In conclusion, to a certain extent, I agree that having a stricter

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would improve

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. But I

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believe that it should

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be supported with other ways, and one of them is by giving audio-visual shows about

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driving.

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Some people say that in all levels of education, frm primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.