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the environment problem facing today's world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. Government and large companies should responsible for the deducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Environmental problems
such
 as Global warming and
pollution
 is on the increase. It is taught by some that these problems can only be solved by the Government and large Organizations, while nothing can be done by individuals. I totally disagree with
this
 notion. I believe to have a safe and conducive
environment both
Accept comma addition
environment, both
 the Authorities and individuals have a part to play.
To Begin
 with, The role of the Government and large companies to deduce the amount of damage inflicted to the society cannot be overemphasized.
Firstly
, most big manufacturing firms built in town are responsible for emitting tonnes of Co2
to
Suggestion
into
 the atmosphere, which does not only cause air and noise
pollution
 but
also
 affects
depletion
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the depletion
 of the ozone layer which is creating Global warming. Government can help curtail these environmental hazards by creating policies to ban the use fuels to encourage energy saving fuels,
such
 as solar.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, organizations should build manufacturing facilities outskirt of town and cities to decrease air and noise
pollution
. In the same vein, man
also
 can help to create a safe Habitat by reducing waste. The incessant use and improper disposal of non biodegradable materials has,
consequently
, led to an Upsurge in waste
pollution
.
This
 has resulted in clogging of water pipelines, causing flooding, destruction of roads and buildings. To have a habitable environment, people should be encouraged to recycle materials rather than being wasteful.
For example
, in my town, each house is paid a fee for every recyclable material collected and returned to the Recycling Agency.
This
 practice reduced the rate of flooding in the area. In conclusion, I believe the responsibility to curtail the damage being done to the habitat involves The Government, Large Cooperations and Man.
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