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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.To what extent do you agree?

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Social networking has become a huge deal in todays world, where all the things are now connected to the internet. But, do they really give a huge negative impact on both individuals and society as a lot of people say? We are going to address that in
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 social media things like Facebook and any other platforms do have a positive side. It can connect people from all over the world, regardless of their location. They
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 ease the communication between peoples since the internet taking charge on everything. While a lot of people agree with
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 digital world of themselves, where everything is just exactly as they want.
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 a strong point that cannot be denied, but I think it is not as bad as it sounds. Those conditions happen because the user who are mostly teenagers are not mature enough to have self control on themselves. Once they have been able to develop that limit than it is going to be perfectly fine for them. It is not the fault of the system, but it is the person who uses them. Overall, social media do have a disadvantage on both individuals and society life for the user. Once they have that self control over themselves than its going to be overcome by the advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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