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Smart devices have put all of the world’s information at our fingertips. The benefits of this development are obvious, but what are the drawbacks?

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People today are capable of accessing the internet through their mobile smart device.
This
 puts them in touch with an extremely large amount of information.
Although
this
 trend has many positive ramifications,
such
 as inter connectivity between people and the spreading of understanding, it is not without drawbacks. To illustrate
this
, the effect smart devices have on their user’s memory and privacy will be analysed. For one, smart devices have caused people to rely less on their memories.
For example
, sites like Wikipedia make it easy for smartphone users to quickly access data on almost any topic. The problem with
this
 convenience is that it encourages people to commit fewer and fewer things to memory, and
this
 makes humanity’s collective understanding of the world increasingly dependent on machinery.
Thus
,
this
 is one of the main drawbacks to having unrestricted access to information through smart devices.
In addition
 to
this
, smart devices reduce people’s privacy, which can lead to unwanted exposure to public scrutiny and ridicule.
For instance
,
last
 year a child in America was unknowingly filmed by his classmate while performing an embarrassing dance routine. After the video was uploaded to the internet,
this
 child suffered extreme teasing and ultimately developed anxiety issues. As
this
 shows, the exchanging of info through smart devices is not always a positive thing. As the above makes clear, smartphone use can weaken a user’s memory and reduce their privacy, two unfortunate drawbacks to a tool that has
otherwise
 been very positive for humanity. These drawbacks will likely remain ongoing obstacles into the foreseeable future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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