Smart devices have put all of the world’s information at our fingertips. The benefits of this development are obvious, but what are the drawbacks?

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People today are capable of accessing the internet through their mobile smart device.

This

puts them in touch with an extremely large amount of information.

Although

this

trend has many positive ramifications,

such

as inter connectivity between people and the spreading of understanding, it is not without drawbacks. To illustrate

this

, the effect smart devices have on their user’s memory and privacy will be analysed. For one, smart devices have caused people to rely less on their memories.

For example

, sites like Wikipedia make it easy for smartphone users to quickly access data on almost any topic. The problem with

this

convenience is that it encourages people to commit fewer and fewer things to memory, and

this

makes humanity’s collective understanding of the world increasingly dependent on machinery.

Thus

this

is one of the main drawbacks to having unrestricted access to information through smart devices.

In addition

this

, smart devices reduce people’s privacy, which can lead to unwanted exposure to public scrutiny and ridicule.

For instance

last

year a child in America was unknowingly filmed by his classmate while performing an embarrassing dance routine. After the video was uploaded to the internet,

this

child suffered extreme teasing and ultimately developed anxiety issues. As

this

shows, the exchanging of info through smart devices is not always a positive thing. As the above makes clear, smartphone use can weaken a user’s memory and reduce their privacy, two unfortunate drawbacks to a tool that has

otherwise

been very positive for humanity. These drawbacks will likely remain ongoing obstacles into the foreseeable future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

260 words

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Smart devices have put all of the world’s information at our fingertips. The benefits of this development are obvious, but what are the drawbacks?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some individuals argue that children should always heed the advice given by their parents, while others believe that children should make decisions independently. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people prefer to eat meals at restaurants, while others like to prepare and eat food in their own home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

"Prevention is better than a cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures.

Influence of human beings on the world ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solution can you suggest?