Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources.

Nowadays for many contemporary artists selling their artwork is the only way of generating revenue.
Although
lots of reputed artists attain a great deal of money in exchange
of
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for
what they create, others hardly earn a sufficient amount to survive. It has triggered strong debates whether they should be funded by
authorities
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the authorities
.
In
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From
my perspective government should provide financial support for some projects. In current situation mainstream artwork attracts significant attention
thus
this
style is the one that generate
highest amount
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the highest amount
of income for artists. These facts discourage artists from diverging conventional trends. Whereas financial support from
government
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the government
can
boost
get the better of
best
practice of less popular styles and help
development
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the development
of new styles without the risk of financial stability. In film industry
art movies
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art, movies
which are produced specially for
film festival
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the film festival
are already sponsored by private organizations. That help filmmakers to
emphsize
special importance or significance
emphasis
emphasize
on
artistic elements
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the artistic elements
of their work rather than focusing on commercial details.
As a result
an
enourmous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
improvement can be seen in
art movies
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art, movies
compared to
last decade
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last decades
the last decade
. In popular
culture
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culture, art
art
major is considered to be one of the riskiest career
path
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paths
for
teenagers especially
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teenagers, especially
in countries where medicine, engineering and military industries are well developed.
Main culprit
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The main culprit
here is obviously financial
unstability
an unstable order
instability
. Gaining a reputation in
art world
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the art world
can take
years even
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years, even
for brightest talents which sometimes make new artist
to work
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work
in several jobs to survive or even
make them to choose
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to make them choose
make them choose
another career path. In
conculsion governmant
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conclusion, government
conculsion government
conclusion government
conculsion governments
conclusion governmant
can help new artist or artist who wants to try out
differnet
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
styles until they develop to their full potential and make a name for themselves in the sector.

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