IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Some people say that shops should sell food products from the local area rather than sell food imported from other country's.Do you agree or disagree?

#people #shops #food #products #area #country
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In today's era of globalization, there are many advocates who promote the sale of food items that are locally produced, whereas others propagate the better quality of imported products. I agree with the ideology that home grown perishables should be given a priority over consumables from another country. There are 2 advantages of advocating national produce.
Firstly
Linking Words
, it is our responsibility to ensure the livelihood of our farmers
.
Accept space
.
 They are heavily reliant on local sale to earn their incomes.
Therefore
Linking Words
, by promoting the use of their crops and poultry we can safeguard their financial security.
Secondly
Linking Words
, the import of consumables can drain a nation's economy. The reason behind
this
Linking Words
 is that heavy import duties are excised on these goods and
hence
Linking Words
 tend to be more expensive.
As a result
Linking Words
, it is more costly for consumers to afford imported vegetables and meat. I would
also
Linking Words
 like to highlight the disadvantages of local produce.
For instance
Linking Words
 Studies suggest that the quality of various crops grown in Australia
such
Linking Words
 as broccoli, lettuce is more superior to the ones that grow in less developed nations.
As a result
Linking Words
, these consumables
although
Linking Words
 more expensive, provide a better quality in comparison to cheaper local vegetables.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, it provides a wider variety to the customer by giving them various options to choose from.
For example
Linking Words
, there are over 20 varieties of mushrooms to choose from if we take into account the mushrooms that are cultivated all over the planet! To conclude, it is important for all of us to take into account the importance of preferring our own national vegetation and poultry in order to support our own farmers and economy.
Submitted by suvanshnirula on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: