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In some areas of the US, a «curfew» is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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In some parts of the US, after a certain time at
night
, teenagers are prevented to go out if they are not together with an adult. In my opinion,
this
 rule could be more safety for adolescents and
also
 relaxing for the parents.
being
Suggestion
Being
 outside at
night
 times can be really dangerous in various
way
Suggestion
ways
.
First
 of all,
this
 rule would be very effective to keep teenagers in safe during the
night
.
some
Suggestion
Some
 places cannot be as trustworthy as the others so leaving alone a teenager in these places at
night
 is really scaring for the parents.
some
Suggestion
Some
 researches show that the commitment an
offense
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
 in darkness is more possible than daytime. In
this
 situation, an adult knows well how to react, but a teenager does not so that would be helpful to accompany to your young children to protect them.
In addition
, spending the
night
 times with the parents would block the teenagers to not join in some illegal groups or a crime gang. At young ages, a friend group may be effective in a person’s character.
For example
, if your friends like to steal something you feel that you have to join them to not stay out of the group.
this
Suggestion
This
 feeling can be really misleading for the teenagers who are in case of build a good character. To sum up, the
curfew which
Accept comma addition
curfew, which
do not permit
Suggestion
does not permit
 the teenagers stay outside during the
night
, is useful for both teenagers and the adults.
being
Suggestion
Being
 together with the teenager as an adult will keep them in
safe
Suggestion
a safe
the safe
.
also
Suggestion
Also
,
this
 rule will decrease the crime done from teenagers.

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