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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve. Others believe individuals can also do some things to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views about how to tackle environmental problems. While some people disagree with the idea of individuals helping to solve environmental problems, I believe that resolving environmental issues should be the responsibility not only of governments and organizations, but
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 of individuals. Some global issues
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 as global warming, air and water pollution and the loss of biodiversity definitely require government intervention. These issues are so enormous that there is simply no way to adequately address these problems without strong commitments from the governments of different countries. The Kyoto protocol, which was adopted in 1997 with the participation of 84 different countries to put a restriction on greenhouse-gas emissions, is an excellent example of how important international cooperation is in dealing with environmental issues. Nowadays,
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 protocol continues to have a world-wide effect on protecting nature.
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, I believe that there are many actions an individual can take to help reduce environmental problems.
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,
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 of driving a car, a person can take the public transport, ride his bicycle, or walk to help reduce carbon emissions, which would reduce air pollution and global warming.
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, turning lights off before leaving a room can save a lot of energy produced by burning fossil fuels like coal and oil.
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, Earth Hour is
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 a great global event that millions of people all over the world join in annually with the hope that their action of turning lights off for one hour can make a great impact on the planet.
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, sorting out and recycling paper can decrease the rate of deforestation, protecting forests—the lungs of Mother Earth. In conclusion, there are good reasons why major environmental problems should mainly rely on governmental and international efforts, but in my opinion the combination of individual and governmental actions would make a greater impact on the environment.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interconnected
  • globalization
  • remote work
  • independence
  • dependency
  • specialization
  • professional services
  • social validation
  • individualism
  • self-reliance
  • collective action
  • sustainability
  • global community
  • navigating
  • complexity
  • environmental movement
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