Some people believe that museums and historic sites should be open for free for children under 18. Do you agree or disagree?

As compared to the past
decade there
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decade, there
has been a drastic decline in people visiting
historic
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historical
places or museums. Some people are of the view that
such
places should be made free to visit, particularly for young visitors. I completely agree to
this
phenomenon, I shall discuss the topic in details and give valid arguments about my stance with examples.
To begin
with, the utmost benefit of making entrance
fees free
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fees, free
of charge is learning factor of young generation. By making zero fees, children will compel their parents to visit these places since it got no charge,
consequently
by more visits
similarly
parents would be contended to invest their time, feeling confident that their kids would learn something, that too with no cost. People are more comfortable visiting places where no amount is involved.
For instance
, in any part of the world if there is a book fair
that is
free to attend, everyone would rush to attend. To elucidate it
further
, free of cost entrance would
also
be a good decision in longer terms of
children
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children's
child
growth. By knowing and visiting these places, kids will learn some good lessons out of our ancestor’s stories and would try to replicate in their lives as well.
For instance
, I made my daughter visited our national museum, where she learnt about our father of the nation, Mr. Muhammad Ali Jinnah. Our tour guide
reveal
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reveals
many wonderful aspects of Jinnah’s life. My daughter got so overwhelmed that she kept talking about
such
characteristics of Jinnah all the way back to home.
Thus
, visiting
these place
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this place
these places
would leave an influential impact on our
kid
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kid's
minds. To recapitulate the aforementioned arguments, I opine that historical places should be free of cost to visit. In order to encourage people to show our young generation who our ancestors were and what wonderful acts they did for us.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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