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In many countries, the quality of life in large cities is becoming worse/ What do you think are the causes of this problem? What measures could be taken to solve it?

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The quality and standard of living in various countries and cities across the globe is becoming unbearable. In my opinion, constant air and environmental pollution are major issues to be noticed.
To begin
 with, increase in the environmental and air pollution are one of the prime issues.
In other words
, major metropolitan cities are being engulfed with various mechanical vehicles that emit carbon monoxide, which in excess causes depletion of the ozone layer.
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 heavy climate change and global warming, thereby creating an imbalance of
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 ecosystem.
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, environmental pollution caused by plastics and nylon bags affects the drainage systems and easy flow of water in the ocean, streams and rivers.
For example
, in Tokyo the recent typhoon in 2018 damaged over 1000 houses and properties, due to the high littering of plastics in the city. These factors pose heavy threats in the lives of people living in these vicinities.
On the other hand
, inclination of vehicles using fuel in substitution for electric cars will be beneficial.
This
 action will bring about an increase in the lifespan of citizens living in these cities.
This
 may be due to the fact that electric motor vehicles support renewable energy and will in the long run reduce the amount of carbon monoxide.
Additionally
, industries and manufacturing firms should be encouraged to support the "going green" initiative and find ways at which they can recycle their products and reduce their usage of fossil fuels.
For instance
, in the United States, the Coke bottling company has started a campaign to retrieve all the plastic bottles with their brand name marked on it, in an effort to reuse and recycle them into making shoes for the less privileged in Pakistan. In conclusion, increases in the shift from cars that consume fuel to electric vehicles and encouraged the habit of recycling by industries will be of a positive impact.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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