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Writing Samples
Band 6

A friend you met last year has invited you to visit him/her in his/her country. You have never been there before and need some information before you leave. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: request some advice about a gift for his/her family ask about activities and clothing in his/her country find out about the food.

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Dear Liza, I am writing
this
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 letter to enquiry about a few things before visiting your country. France is a beautiful country and
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the curosity
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curosity
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curiosity
 to know more about the place is high. My friends who have visited Paris often talk about the tasty food and the beautiful culture. Buying gifts is a difficult task for me, even for dear ones. So please advise on what sort of things you and your wife like to receive especially from Canada. I am buying for the kids
marvel
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Marvel
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 toys and video games as you have mentioned multiple times
of
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their obsession with Marvel. There are tons of activities to do in a different country but kindly do let me know what have you planned for my visit. Is there any specific type of clothes should I wear? I would like to wear clothes
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 the weather and culture as I don’t want to stand out. Now, there are so many food
allergy
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allergies
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 that I have which is being treated.
Thus
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, it’s important for me to know what
are
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the
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kinds of food we will be eating during my visit. I am very excited to meet you and your family. See you soon! Yours Sincerely, Umida Abdumajitova

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coherence cohesion
Try to address specific areas you want to improve, like the logical flow of information. Making each paragraph focus on a single idea can help achieve this.
task achievement
To enhance the task response, add more details or ask a few more specific questions about the activities planned, so your friend has a clear idea of what information to provide.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are very well done, providing a clear start and end to your letter.
task achievement
Your writing tone is very suitable for the task, maintaining a friendly yet formal demeanor, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
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