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Some people say the government should not put money into building theatres and sports stadiums; they should spend more money on medical care and education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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People are becoming more aware and concern with the government spending its money in various sectors. With rising awareness, some argue that public money should not be invested in
entertainment
 buildings and
instead
 it should be paid towards hospitals and teaching for the public. According to me,
spending a
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spending, a
 national income on
health
 and educating seems more important than
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
theatre
 or sports stadiums,
therefore
 it is wise to let private companies handle the
entertainment
 sector. Funding the
health
 and education field could benefit the nation highly which
also
 works in the best interest of its people. With
better medical care population
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a better medical care population
 will be able to stay healthy and work functionally which in turn increases their tax contribution towards the finance of their country. Apart from that with more funding towards teaching, the young generation will be able to have a better chance of getting a wide choice of careers.
For instance
, nations like Canada and Australia, which provide free
health
 care and teaching has a highly functional economy, while keeping their people satisfied with their needs.
On the contrary
,
entertainment
also
 holds some importance among people. If
movieplexs
 and stadiums stop receiving their funding than the population will find it difficult to find different ways to
keeps
Suggestion
keep
 themselves entertained. In order to avoid losing their valuable finance over those buildings, private companies should be allowed to take over the
entertainment
 field. From the above discussion, we can conclude that spending on income tax money should be focused on
health
 and education while privatizing the
entertainment
 building to companies, so that they could work adequately in the public's interest.
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