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Many working people get little or no exercise during the workday or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do many people do not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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In prevailing scenario, the way of working has transformed tremendously owing to which people are becoming unhealthy. Some valid causes and few remedial measures of
this
 ongoing trend will be
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make clear and (more) comprehensible
elucidated
 in
upcoming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
. To embark with, there are some tangible causes of
this
 negative ongoing phenomenon. The most pertinent one is
busy schedule
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a busy schedule
 of workers
.
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.
 In almost every working firm
,
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,
 works are target oriented and to accomplish
this
 staff has to spend their time in jobs without paying heed towards their
health
,
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,
 which adversely affects them.
Furthermore
, people in today's era are becoming the materialistic and have become a great part of
this
race
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race, therefore,
therefore
, they wholly starts to saturate their mind with worldly possessions without caring their true wealth
that is
health
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healthy
. To illustrate, mostly Human Resource's are always allured with bonuses
,
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,
 incentives
etcetera
. There
are
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is
 a deluge of ways to make workers careful about their
health
. The tangible solution is employers should offer flexible working schedule. There must be proper timing
for
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of
 their work so that they can draw a line between their personal and professional world
.
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.
 What is more, an individual should even prioritise his
health
 rather than money, name and fame
.
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.
 In order to
this
,
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,
 he must spare and devote some quality time towards his family and perform some exercise to become physically and mentally fit which would definitely fosters their productivity rate. To conclude, it is indeed reasonable to state that working scenarios has been
changed but
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changed, but
 an integrated endeavours of employees and employers would hopefully reverse
this
 issue and facilitate them to be fit and healthy.

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