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The medical technology is responsible for increasing the average life expectancy. Do you think it is a curse or a blessing?

#technology #life #expectancy #curse
Although
such
 topics, in all likelihood, never will yield a consensual agreement, a constructive dialogue on '
life
expectancy
 has been increased due to the advancements in medical technology' can lead to thought-provoking discussions. My view is that irrespective of the numerous arguments that exist on either side
,
Accept space
,
it can become a curse to the human race. In
this
 essay, I shall explain it by analysing both sides of the statement. There are several reasons in favour of my stance. To commence with, it can be considered the rise in human population is one among the disadvantages of extended
life
expectancy
. It is important to note that medical technologies are helping the humans to attain more years to survive in
this
 world rather than providing good health during a
person
's lifetime.
For example
, when a
person
 at above average
life
expectancy
 period, technologies help him to overcome his illness.
Therefore
, the aforementioned discussion shows that increase in the population can be a curse. Another pivotal aspect of the argument is that the old generation will really find difficult to get assistance with their daily routine tasks because of the difficulties with motor skills.
Although
 he or she can overcome an illness, it would not be easier to find a
person
 who they can live with because of the generation gap. Here is a hypothetical example. A
person
 above 100 years old has at least 4 generations behind him, and the immediate generation
also
 can be in the same situation makes the younger children a burden.
This
 essay discussed complications
such
 as increased world population and difficulty with sustaining at a very old age due to increased average
life
expectancy
. The equally potential evidence to support the arguments I have provided, underlines my opinion.
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