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Nowadays environmental problems are too big for individual countries or people to solve. We have reached the stage where we need cooperation on an international level to protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that to solve the climate issue is an enormous task for the individual countries and people. We have to take the help of each other to solve
this
 problem.
This
 essay completely disagrees with
this
 statement because we need to take the responsibility on individual basis of our
environment
 and plant more trees as much as we can.
To begin
 with, one of the best
way
Suggestion
ways
 to make our
environment
 better is that we need to take the responsibility of our surroundings. We have to use the proper garbage
system
 to throw our waste, and states need
make
Suggestion
to make
 the proper garbage
system
 and force people to follow that
system
, and take the action against whom, who does not follow the guidelines of the government. And states should
also
 make the proper recycling
system
 as well, so the waste does consume in the betterment of the society.
For example
, there is report that
tells
express in words
says
 that if we just take care of our surrounding it will be enough for making the whole
environment
 better.
Secondly
, we need to plant trees as much as we can, and spread the awareness about the merits of planting
tree
Suggestion
trees
. Trees reduce the temperature of the
environment
 where they planted, and
also
 provide us oxygen and fresh
environment
. They prevent us to become the victim of heatstroke,
thus
 we need to aware people about
this
.
For instance
, after heatstroke hit Pakistan in 2015, Current Prime Minister of Pakistan, Imran Khan,
Wo
the person or persons that; the one that
who
 was at that time not the Prime Minister, initiate the
compaign
a race between candidates for elective office
campaign
 of 1 billion trees in one of the states of Pakistan that helped a lot in the betterment of the
environment
 in that state. In conclusion, some believe that we should cooperate each other to solve environmental problem,
however
, I think that individual efforts can
also
 bring the change in our
environment
.
Submitted by saifuddin.abdulrehman on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • climate change
  • cross-border impacts
  • unified global response
  • biodiversity loss
  • geopolitical boundaries
  • international cooperation
  • renewable energy projects
  • collective responsibility
  • environmental degradation
  • international agreements
  • scope and impact
  • environmental challenges
  • policymaking
  • plastic pollution
  • marine environments
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