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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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Money is required by everyone for all their day to day activities. Some people often measure
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 by wealth or materialistic belongings. I strongly disagree with
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 opinion. I will explore on the topic of
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 in the subsequent paragraphs.
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 with, the basic necessity of a
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 are food, clothing and shelter. Money drives as a factor to achieve all these basic amenities.
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, many a times people start measuring
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 with wealth.
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,
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 is subjective and differs from
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 to
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 and
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, is not quantifiable.
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, for mountain climbers, climbing Mount Everest is a way to be successful whereas, for a student working hard and scoring a grade ’A’ is successful.
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, it becomes difficult to measure
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.
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 cannot be measured in terms of money, as it is relative.
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, for a poor individual a particular amount of money can make him feel successful as compared to a rich individual who won’t be concerned at all with that particular amount of money. The majority of people feel proud when they achieve something that they aimed for, are difficult to achieve or things
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 not achieved by other people. My personal experience to achieve happiness is setting a short attainable goal on a weekly basis and work toward achieving it.
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, one can
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 make long term goals along with the short one and work hard to achieve it. Accomplishing
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 goals can make a
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 feel successful. To conclude,
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, as
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 is relative, there is a plethora of factors that can make an individual feel it.
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, a specific factor can be accomplishing any ambitious task.
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