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Some people think high-end technology can prevent and cut down the rate of committing crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some citizens believe that, advanced
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 can reduce, and avoid the total proportions of executing the crime. In my opinion, I disagree to
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 regard that, online communicating media and rate of illegal act are connected with each other.
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, I believe that, telecommunications is one of the major reasons that are causing depression, and anger among individuals, which is leading to these kind of situations.
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 essay will discuss about various factors on the impact of the
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 in the world. On the one hand, folks, and family members usually tend to do tasks, which they observe, since their toddler period.
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, While, most of the kids get's opportunity to spend quality time and, receive affection, little kid needs to face trauma, which
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, lead to dreadful acts once they reach their adulthood.
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, automation cannot be totally considered to increase of assassination rates in all over the globe.
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, many people today, are continuously addicted to
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 on laptops and mobile phones.
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, Most of the communities prefer to engage themselves in social media, rather than, on community gatherings, and activities. While, few are making benefit with utilizing
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, others are misusing by violating the needs of mechanization, by putting content that cause differences between societies, and other attributes. These events have led to fury in population
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, leading to physical abuse and manslaughter.
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, In conclusion, I can conclude that, despite of advancements of machines and mechanics, it is not directly connected to sinful acts and, cannot able to prevent the occurrence of
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 situations. Though, uploading tech medium with provoking context, it can be controlled by human intelligence and activities to spread awareness throughout the world.
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