After graduating from high school , some young people decide to start working right away instead of going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this?

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Part
of the youth in the
society choosing
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society, choosing
to begin
working right after
thier
of them or themselves
their
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there
highschool
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high school
graduation as a substitute for university higher education. It is partly due to the financial
crisis which
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crisis, which
faced by the people today.
However
,
this
essay will argue on both merits and demerits of
above statement
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the above statement
. There is a plethora of advantages in both views. Getting to the university education just after graduation will set up an
addtional
further or added
additional
qualification
to
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for
an individual. To
iluustrate
clarify by giving an example of
illustrate
the above fact
,
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,
If
some one
a human being
someone
is with a
bacholors
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bachelor's
bachelors
bachelors'
degree they will be able to get a demanding job with a high salary in the job market.
which
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Which
can result in
,
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,
professional competency and skill.
on
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On
the other hand, working after
highschool
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high school
can be beneficial in many ways.
for
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For
example, since being an early budding
entrapreneur
someone who organizes a business venture and assumes the risk for it
entrepreneur
entrepreneurs
in the industrial
feild
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
gives more
oppotunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
. Because the
competetion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
computation
competitions
between the society is getting tougher day by day.
More over
in addition
Moreover
, if an individual is earning
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at
such
age he
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age, he
or she will be
more financial
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more financially
stable than others.
which
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Which
leads them to pay
thier
of them or themselves
their
own expenditures.
contarily
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Contrarily
Contarily
, there are plenty of
draw backs
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
as well.
Heavy workload
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The heavy workload
in the universities can be
resulting
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result
a
stressfull
extremely irritating to the nerves
stressful
life.
working
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Working
fulltime
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full time
can be cause
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can cause
can be caused
various damages to the health.
for
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For
example, depression.
More over they
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Moreover, they
Moreover they
do not get a chance to interact with the society which can be lead to interrupt the social interactions.
repucussions
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The repercussions
Repercussions
Replications
Reputations
Repucussions
of these can be mental health issues. In conclusion, there are
multitude
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a multitude
of merits and demerits about starting a job or higher education after graduation it is up to the person's desire whether to choose studies or work.
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