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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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 people chose to live alone, especially in metropolitan areas and
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 rate is far higher in developed countries and seems like
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 has become quite normal there. I believe
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 has more negative consequences than the few positive outcomes it offers. The
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 family is seen to be positive from better personal skill development and economic perspective. A single-member family forces a person to learn some basic skills including cooking, cleaning the house, paying the utility bills, managing personal finance, purchasing daily commodities, adopting hobbies and many more important skills.
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 makes someone self-dependent which has a greater impact on the development of the country in a broader sense.
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, research shows that students who stay away from home for their tertiary degrees learn more skills and become more self-dependent than pupils who study from home.
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, a
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 family member is bound to do a job, business or have some sort of arrangement for a steady earning and
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 has a great positive impact on a country’s economy. From the opposite viewpoint, the
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 of increasing
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 family has many negative consequences.
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, the increasing
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 of living alone has a direct relationship
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 the percentage of people suffer from psychological problems these days. Living alone creates loneliness and depression, unlike the traditional family where there are always others to share someone’s distress and sadness. The isolation often leads people to choose a lifestyle
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 often negative. A recent study reveals that
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 family members often rely on drugs and many of them become addicted. The human is a social being and living alone is against their natural tendency. For many, bearing the total expenses is tough and
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 leads them to get involved in crimes. In conclusion, the number of
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 families is increasing these days and
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 has some positive aspects despite many severe negative consequences.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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