You are interested in attending a training course abroad but require financial support to do so. Write a letter to the education department requesting financial assistance. ▪️Introduce yourself ▪️Describe the training course and how it would benefit your work ▪️Explain why you need financial assist ance.
Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is Keyhan Ebrahimi and I have been working in the ground handling (GH) department for about 10 years. I am writing to request funds in order to participate in the Dangerous Goods (DG) course which will be held in Germany on the 20th of April.
Self-evidently, as we are the only operator of DG and provide service to various airlines it is recommended for us to be trained in DG handling
due to
the international organizations' requirements.
Although
, we know how to handle these materials, we need a certificate to hand over when we are being audited by those organizations. Therefore
, I would like to take part in this
course so that there will not be a finding in forthcoming inspections.
As a matter of fact, my personal budget is limited and I would like you as an education department to support me financially to achieve this
goal in order to improve our service along with
our company's reputation.
Thank you in advance for considering my letter and I am available for further
information if needed.
sincerely yours
Keyhan EbrahimiSubmitted by keyhan454 on
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task response
Your letter successfully introduces yourself, describes the training course, and explains why you need financial assistance, satisfying the main task requirements. To further improve, try to unfold your arguments more gradually, giving more background on the importance of the training before jumping into the request.
coherence
Your letter has a clear logical structure, which makes it easy to follow. You could enhance the coherence by creating smoother transitions between paragraphs. For instance, after introducing the course and its importance, you can use phrases like 'Given this background' or 'Consequently' when moving to your personal financial situation.
cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriately formal and match the context of your letter, enhancing its coherence and cohesion. To enhance, consider adding a more personalized closing line that reflects your hope for a positive response.