These days these days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them. do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in term of family development.

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Owing to rising issues over migrating another nation along with their family,

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the major concern

a major concern

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has arisen

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the multitude

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of merits and demerits regarding the same have come to

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these days which are to be discussed in the following paragraphs. To initiate with the positive aspects the most conspicuous one is that numerous individuals go to foreign nations to acquire study in world's best universities

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As, it is a splendid way to Set a career

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from India, many scholars are moving to USA for getting

education

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an education

from the best universities.

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substantial advantage given by them is that student who move abroad for their academic purposes are require care and love because in

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any of various alternatives; some other

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place they have to face countless obstacles and they feel loneliness in another country. In various

cases learners

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cases, learners

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are going

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, if parents live along with

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them, then

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children could get

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the proper care

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However negative

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However, negative

aspects linked to

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situation can

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be noticed at distance levels. The most noticeable one is that living in

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country along with family members is

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becoming

more expensive. To be specific, mostly in Abroad peoples are

live

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living

in apartments and they share the rooms with others and they pay only half of the rent. As a consequence, if they take their family with

them

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them, then

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they have to pay full rent and it

effects

have an effect upon

affects

their financial status.

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, in

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way

majority

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the majority

of parents will discomfortable. Since they disconnected from their culture and traditions.

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, they feel culture shock and feel boring to live there. In conclusion, it is quite discernible after thorough analysis of

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topic that

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the advantages

outweigh disadvantages. So, here it would be better to make

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a handful

the handful

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of endeavours to

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gather, as of natural products

reap

the benefits and to discard the drawbacks.

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These days these days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them. do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in term of family development.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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