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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and violent crimes increases. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, there has been controversy over the issue of capital
punishment
, where some people may think capital
punishment
 remains necessary to maintain low rates of violence and
crime
 of society, but others do not. Regarding
this
 problem, I completely agree with preserving the
death
penalty
 in order to offer citizens’ a safe and secure living environment as I will discuss
further
 in the following essay. To start with, proponents of
this
 issue agree maintaining capital
punishment
 is crucial to preventing criminals from committing offences repeatedly and to help prevent people from living in fear of violent
crime
. There is growing evidence that the
death
penalty
 is essential to controlling violent behaviour and showing that
crime
 is not tolerated. The evidence for
this
 rationale is based on examples from several non-
death
-
penalty
 countries which describes some people suffering attacks from strangers,
such
 as shooting or stabbing, leading to
death
. 
Therefore
, in
such
 cases, I deem that the
death
penalty
 should be maintained in order to protect people as well as stem public panic.
Nevertheless
, some critics try to abolish capital
punishment
, they may think
crime
 rates are not reduced by the
death
penalty
 and that it does not deter the root causes of violent
crime
. Opponents are convinced that it is a form of revenge, which delivers a violent message and encourages people to solve
this
 problem with violence. I advocate the
death
penalty
 is necessary to prevent the crimes from happening again and to decrease the threat to others, because abolishing the
death
penalty
 does not do enough to address violent
crime
 deterrence and public panic. To sum up, capital 
punishment
 is a debatable problem with strong views on both sides. Taking prompt action can reduce
crime
 and panic.
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