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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study aboard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Introduction
There is no doubt that the rate of
crime
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 had increased in the past century to an extreme level.Each Year, the
crime
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 rates is significantly higher than the previous year.Most of the people think that the main reason for the violent behaviours of the communities is media,
on the contrary
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, others believe that
poverty
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 and
lack
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 of
education
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 contributes to
this
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 cause with much more.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, if we have a look at Social Media, Movies and video games, It is clear to everyone that all the content includes violent actions and behaviours which makes aggression socially acceptable leading to higher
crime
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 rates.
On the other hand
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, the majority think that
Body paragraph 2
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poverty
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Poverty
 and the need for life essentials
such
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 as food and shelter has much greater
infuence
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
 on
icreasing
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the increasing crime rate
increasing crime rate
crime
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 rate and criminals.In my opinion media
,
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,
poverty
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 and
lack
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 of
education
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 are all on the same level and must be tackled and treated by the
governoments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
.
Body paragraph 3
More over
in addition
Moreover
,
lack
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 of
education
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 is one
on
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of
 the main reasons of developing
ignorent
uneducated in general; lacking knowledge or sophistication
ignorant
personals
a human being
persons
 whom they
dont
do not
don't
yeild
be the cause or source of
yield
 to any law.By default those whom are not educated will tend to have no jobs and
accordingly
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 no income or means of supporting their way of living,
hence
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 due to
poverty
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 and the need of surviving the
crime
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 rates will increase.
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Some say that providing proper
education
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 to the young ones and teaching them from a young age will help them have self
diceplne
a branch of knowledge
discipline
 and
accordignly
(sentence connectors) because of the reason given
accordingly
 self control
,
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,
 leading to a better lifestyle and
accordingly
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 decreasing the percentage of
crime
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 in those generations.
However
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 the rest
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still
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Still
 insists that the problems coming from the media side
is
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are
 much more
seveir
intensely or extremely bad or unpleasant in degree or quality
severe
 as nowadays
,
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,
 technologies are reachable and
accessable
capable of being reached
accessible
 for everyone and they are
Body paragraph 6
the
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The
 main reason for the aggression in the society.
Body paragraph 7
In conclusion, wither its media
,
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,
lack
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 of
education
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 or
poverty
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,
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,
 they are all essential
contributers
someone who contributes (or promises to contribute) a sum of money
contributors
contributes
contributor
 in increasing the
crime
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 rate and
governoments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 must
Conclusion
have
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Have
 a very
stricked
rigidly accurate; allowing no deviation from a standard
strict
 plan to face those
chellanges
take exception to
challenges
 and provide solutions.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural awareness
  • adaptability
  • academic opportunities
  • specialized programs
  • prestigious courses
  • language proficiency
  • professional network
  • globalized job market
  • personal development
  • independence
  • life skills
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