In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study aboard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

There is no doubt that the rate of
crime
had increased in the past century to an extreme level.Each Year, the
crime
rates is significantly higher than the previous year.Most of the people think that the main reason for the violent behaviours of the communities is media,
on the contrary
, others believe that
poverty
and
lack
of
education
contributes to
this
cause with much more.
Firstly
, if we have a look at Social Media, Movies and video games, It is clear to everyone that all the content includes violent actions and behaviours which makes aggression socially acceptable leading to higher
crime
rates.
On the other hand
, the majority think that
poverty
Suggestion
Poverty
and the need for life essentials
such
as food and shelter has much greater
infuence
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
on
icreasing
Suggestion
the increasing crime rate
increasing crime rate
crime
rate and criminals.In my opinion media
,
Accept space
,
poverty
and
lack
of
education
are all on the same level and must be tackled and treated by the
governoments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
.
More over
in addition
Moreover
,
lack
of
education
is one
on
Suggestion
of
the main reasons of developing
ignorent
uneducated in general; lacking knowledge or sophistication
ignorant
personals
a human being
persons
whom they
dont
do not
don't
yeild
be the cause or source of
yield
to any law.By default those whom are not educated will tend to have no jobs and
accordingly
no income or means of supporting their way of living,
hence
due to
poverty
and the need of surviving the
crime
rates will increase. Some say that providing proper
education
to the young ones and teaching them from a young age will help them have self
diceplne
a branch of knowledge
discipline
and
accordignly
(sentence connectors) because of the reason given
accordingly
self control
,
Accept space
,
leading to a better lifestyle and
accordingly
decreasing the percentage of
crime
in those generations.
However
the rest
still
Suggestion
Still
insists that the problems coming from the media side
is
Suggestion
are
much more
seveir
intensely or extremely bad or unpleasant in degree or quality
severe
as nowadays
,
Accept space
,
technologies are reachable and
accessable
capable of being reached
accessible
for everyone and they are
the
Suggestion
The
main reason for the aggression in the society. In conclusion, wither its media
,
Accept space
,
lack
of
education
or
poverty
,
Accept space
,
they are all essential
contributers
someone who contributes (or promises to contribute) a sum of money
contributors
contributes
contributor
in increasing the
crime
rate and
governoments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
must
have
Suggestion
Have
a very
stricked
rigidly accurate; allowing no deviation from a standard
strict
plan to face those
chellanges
take exception to
challenges
and provide solutions.
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